Day 15 at the NaPoWriMo 2013 April adventure featured a glimpse at the Pantun poetic form.
The basic pantun consists of a quatrain (4-line verse). Commonly, each line contains between 8 and 12 syllables, and employs an abab rhyme scheme. A pantun traditionally follows a fixed rhythm. Again, per Wikipedia, “The first and second lines sometimes appear completely disconnected in meaning from the third and fourth, but there is almost invariably a link of some sort. Whether it be a mere association of ideas, or of feeling, expressed through assonance or through the faintest nuance of a thought, it is nearly always traceable.”
MARIE ELENA’S ATTEMPT:
FADINGThreadbare blankets lay lightly on the chaise; His loose change clinking as he shuffles off. A ticking clock broadcasts that life’s a race, While clicking cane attends a muffled cough. © Copyright Marie Elena Good – 2013
BLOOMS OF LOVE
…and all at once, the rain had ceased.
When did my children grow so quick?
The length of sunshine has increased.
Why has it left me feeling sick
when the warmth of Spring emerges?
Little girls become young women
Comfort in this season’s surges.
and all the changes from within –
blossoms having rooted now bloom,
Decorating each life they touch,
fragrant flowers fill up the room.
truly knowing they mean so much.
Life’s bouquet gathered together,
Grown in love to know what life means;
flourishing in all kinds of weather,
© Copyright Walter J. Wojtanik – 2013